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PostSubject: Love No More   Love No More I_icon_minitimeThu Jun 11 2015, 10:57

Love No More.

The obsidian pendulum swung. A darkness that defied gravity, the ungrounded sceptre hung inverted; each scything pass through the air produced an electrical hum bound in Machiavellian intent. Its crackle a distant promise from a land of pain, a locked desire, a caged hunger, a woeful venomous creature to its core. How I longed for its cold embrace.

The ceiling was as distant as the tallest spires, sunk down in this pit. There I stood in the foetid air laid rank with the sulphur and the brimstone of the aether, my torso lathered with oil and my long dark hair smoothed over my back following along the floor like a funeral drape of old. I stare at the incoherent green haze shot with purple hue that surrounds the swinging giant, an after-image of its cutting figure swirls in the mists of forgotten time; the odd lashed tendril of thought smashes against its invisible cage in a dazzle of electrified light and I know that the time has come again.

My pale hand stretches out, my mouth dry with anticipation, I close my eyes and spread my fingers such that I would fly and hold to my bosom this malefic beast’s perfection. Time slows to an infinite crawl as I reach forward, a crescendo rising in my chest as my arm finds its limit; oh sweet excruciating pain. I am thrown backward as again I am rejected. But yet I return, once my shudders subside and I rise from my pleasured slumber, I return. I will always return.

Swinging, ever swinging. I stand and breathe, the searing light followed the scars of old, a pattern of pain that laces its way up my arms and across my body; I am art refined. To look upon me is to look upon desire manifest, a passion, a need, a desperate hunger. Death is always a moment away, yet I never die. I am wanted still and she knows there is no other way, no other life for her to live but with me. I will bring her life like a sweet sickly nectar to her lips and she will be free.

The smooth glass floor is grooved around the ever swinging sentience, my muse bears my adoration poorly as I rove its features with my eyes, the aeons passing as I walk the circumference, grinding the chamber floor with glacial patience beneath even my bare light feet. None can comprehend my devotion and my love, none can witness my rebirth; locked here in the squalor and the filth we will become one.

I will be loved as I love, and then love shall be no more.

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PostSubject: Re: Love No More   Love No More I_icon_minitimeFri Jun 12 2015, 15:04

This is a strong start to the competition, Dragontree. I really enjoyed reading this entry. Smile

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PostSubject: Re: Love No More   Love No More I_icon_minitimeFri Jun 12 2015, 15:30

Thanks Cav Smile it still needs a bit of editing, I've noticed a few bits and bobs to correct but pretty happy with it!

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PostSubject: Re: Love No More   Love No More I_icon_minitimeSun Jun 14 2015, 03:45

Really nice story, Dragontree.

The last sentence was absolute aces!
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PostSubject: Re: Love No More   Love No More I_icon_minitimeMon Jul 13 2015, 12:46

Very descriptive. I may be tired or toddler-addled, but this one went over my head, lol. Sorry, amigo; it's probably my fault. If it's any consolation, this seems to be very similar, mechanically, to stories that have done well in this event in past years.
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PostSubject: Re: Love No More   Love No More I_icon_minitimeTue Jul 14 2015, 04:32

Nice work Dragontree, I sense an homage to The Pendulum And The Pit? Eldar of all flavours have been drawing on Poe for over 25 years, so its a good fit Smile

And agree that the last line is a winner!

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PostSubject: Re: Love No More   Love No More I_icon_minitimeTue Jul 14 2015, 08:37

Well spotted sir, I'm a big fan of Poe and enjoy his work immensely. Him and Lovecraft are the best malformed horror stories for me.

I'm very pleased with my story but I think there are some absolutely brilliant ones I'm going up against so not too hopeful but always nice to have people read something I've written Smile

Ta guys!

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